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Re: Verse from mixtape....

Postby PAINKILLƎR » Dec 6th, '13, 07:09

Fuck this was pretty ill, of course since you're very experienced. The rhyming is great and it felt natural, the flow of the whole thing was on point, easier than a lot of the pieces you'd fine on the cw section.

This is just a straight up bars type track right? It's well done lots of your lines are hard hitting, I can sort of feel your deliver already without the recording.

Anyway, I'm not as experienced as you are so that's as much as I can give you. I really like it, great read.
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Re: Verse from mixtape....

Postby CanadaPure » Dec 6th, '13, 20:57

Dope shit, don't really have much to say aside from that. Just really cool stuff. Looking forward to hearing the mixtape too :flutter:
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Re: Verse from mixtape....

Postby Eedee » Dec 7th, '13, 04:33

Whew, that shit was fire. Lovin' the vibe and I got the flow down I think. :y:
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Re: Verse from mixtape....

Postby Just Silver » Dec 7th, '13, 18:21

Pretty good stuff second half was better imo
Most of it is a well written piece

For an audio piece it'll be interesting getting all the material to flow

Also Will there be a hook?

Some punches in the second half were pretty cool such as the pee on line
Overall its pretty decent at first I thought this was underdog lol :o I get the names messed up
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Re: Verse from mixtape....

Postby shadyblogger » Dec 9th, '13, 03:58

I liked the rhyming and the way the verses played out. it was pretty dope and fun to read. I feel like if this was rapped it would be with like a ferocious intensity. It was pretty cool.
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