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a spark in the dark

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a spark in the dark

Postby Dewey Decimal » Feb 22nd, '14, 01:03

Just cuz ur a champion doesnt mean your spitting that fire
Throw a bunch of wack niggas in a tournament and give the winner a title
act like im not jerkin those triggas
I got a round for every round , ill murder u niggas
My boys the reason that im pushing yayo
Hes not no small fry , hes the full potato
Im sorry i aint been around, my nigga
But theres alot of dimebags in a pound, my nigga
And all my dawgs are getting locked in the pound, my nigga
They pound my niggas into the ground, my nigga
U run the city and ill run the town, my nigga
Drinking dairy im dewey decimal
I eat wheat, meat, and fruits and vegetables
I got more songs than a music festival
And ill raise the roof til the roofs celestial
I act strange, a 1 man party livin life in the fast lane
Multiple personalities and we each have our own rap name
It goes dewey first, lucipher, and nova the rebel
Jimmy the snake, criminal way and the last one is nobody special
But were all full of ourselves and on a whole other level
Prayin to GOD youll stay afloat on our vessel
But this is only possible when u sell your soul to the devil


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Re: a spark in the dark

Postby shadyblogger » Feb 22nd, '14, 01:33

Nice little piece. I dig your flow bro
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Re: a spark in the dark

Postby Dewey Decimal » Feb 22nd, '14, 01:39

I was tryina put in a new avy and it kept saying the file was too big , ill fuck around with it some more later




Thanks for reading boys
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Re: a spark in the dark

Postby Just Silver » Feb 23rd, '14, 03:42

Great rhymes in the beginning guy

I didn't like the string of n words but it'd sound totally different through audio I suppose
Your a better writer than I thought

Just tone down repetition and practice :y:
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Re: a spark in the dark

Postby William005 » Feb 26th, '14, 10:34

Nice
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