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Sweet & Sour

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Sweet & Sour

Postby Dewey Decimal » Mar 31st, '14, 02:22

Never did write a book, Never did the things my idol could
Used to be young but i never had a childhood
So i act mature for my age, full of mysterious wit
Til the haze gets blown and i make a joke out of serious shit
Friends become enemies, why? Dew is the new jekyll n hyde
And this liquor.is the elixer that make my identitys Hide
Calm and collected, u dont want to see my adrenaline spike
Whats the difference between dead or alive? Pupils dilate and theres red in my eyes
Dont need to grab your attention to leave a lasting impression
I dont want to know but im asking the question
Sweet n sour , thats a metaphore for manic depression
Tell u dont do drugs then i smoke a thick joint
Make a pig oink , cuz im 2 faced , im like a trick coin
The mic'll surge on ya, Save your life, then murder ya
Cuz im hot and im cold like hypothermia


Chorus
Inner conflict, Winters hotness, im sweet and im sour
Wins and losses, Liquids, solids, Eat and Devour
when im Sleeping on downers, i can turn weeks into hours
Now tell me who else speaks of this power?
Bitch i got the ability of.turning Seeds into flowers
Reach for the outer, but know your role U cant take Luigi to Bowser
Deweys just one persona, whats a shooting star to a meteor shower?



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Might make some changes , nothings written in stone
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Re: Sweet & Sour

Postby Just Silver » Apr 27th, '14, 16:38

Your delivery is nice and the rhyme schemes keep on going well
Too bad you haven't been writing for a while

Honestly too many quotables to name I enjoyed it almost reminiscent of some of my older work

Nothing I can really complain about besides the length of the chorus
Otherwise well done
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Re: Sweet & Sour

Postby Dewey Decimal » May 9th, '14, 21:43

probably one of my weaker drops tbh . Thanks for checking it out
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Re: Sweet & Sour

Postby shadyblogger » May 9th, '14, 21:57

That was cool
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Re: Sweet & Sour

Postby Enimee » May 19th, '14, 06:54

Very solid flow throughout the entire piece.
Nice work
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