Standing in the Spotlight

[Flamez]

LOF - viewtopic.php?f=24&t=164255&p=2339081#
Beat - https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=PlHRlNNSLss

I was bored so wrote this today.

(Chorus)
**In the Instrumental**

(Verse 1)

I feel like this is a new life I’ve been given a new start
Everything that fell apart before formed a purple heart
Open wounds cured and broken body parts reinvigorated
My mind finally at peace liberated and my soul resuscitated
No longer incapacitated all eyes on me the stars point at me
guarantee nobody expected me to become a rapper or an emcee
been thrown around in debris now I’m on a lyrical killing spree
with the key in the ignition I’m moving forward to better things
no strings attached on me, but what I do have are angel wings
swimming in a pool of kings with water that purifies your eyes
with the white bright lights flashing like diamonds in the sky
I realize I may be setting myself up for failure, but I’ll get through it
I been through struggles and trained myself like a soldier now I don’t quit
I admit I can feel the vibe with my spine tingling I’m ready for action
the crowd roars with satisfaction this is the main attraction..

(Chorus)
**In the Instrumental**

(Verse 2)

standing in the middle of the stage with a mic in hand
the crowd chanting feeding me energy I’m in command,
people demand more, it feels so good to be back on track
pushing forward not looking back to my insomniac past,
I’m a one man wolf pack running fast like if today was my last
I’ve surpassed the test of life now I’m standing in the spotlight,
no more stage fright when the light shines on me I ignite
explode like dynamite feeling energized its getting my blood pumping,
vein’s jumping, juices flowing, and my heart thumping,
back in the studio bumping beats letting loose writing songs
feel no weakness, it’s like I’m re-born from a spark feeling strong,
driving along this road doing no wrong riding this wave to the top
connecting the dots a new star is formed and rain starts to drop
I stop - Look up to the night sky, and see my name light up in flames
It must be a sign I acclaim, that my new name that’s written I will proclaim

(Chorus)
**In the Instrumental**
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Feedback appreciated.

[Just Silver]

honestly didnt check the beat usually its the last thing of importance to me

i liked the type of rhymes you had ex. resuscitated , reinvigoration
the vocab here works in a way where the flow switches up

the one man wolf pack line is pretty cool as a whole i can flow without the beat so thats a plus

i wanna check the chorus i just didnt wanna be disappointed tbh usually im not a fan of an instrumental chorus pre recorded

but overall a decent piece .. slept on

[Flamez]

Thanks man and it's alright. haha

Whenever I can I'll try not to have instrumentals with a chorus

[Just Silver]

that instrumental was super over produced for this piece try more simple beats not saying hype beats never work its just alot harder to match everything up

[ilovebender.com]

I like it but I want to see it on Broadway or in Disney, sorry...
"I feel like this is a new life I’ve been given a new start
Everything that fell apart before formed a purple heart
Open wounds cured and broken body parts reinvigorated..."
It's catchy.

Forgive me. - That's probably not what you wanted to read and... Maybe I should have listened to the beat.
Still good though.