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Postby stealth » Nov 8th, '05, 00:00

Have you ever cried tears you didn
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Postby ThomasAguanis » Nov 8th, '05, 00:14

dammnnnn that was hot
that was one of your best verses i think i ever read.
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Postby stealth » Nov 8th, '05, 00:16

real emotion was in it, i just wrote down wat came out of my head through the beat of when im gone
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Postby ThomasAguanis » Nov 8th, '05, 00:17

yea. its a nice beat to have an emotional song to. hopefully the instrumental will be released soon. i have a feeling i may be able to write to it too.
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Postby Shadyluva » Nov 8th, '05, 00:27

its deep
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lifee is GREAT
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Postby Erick » Nov 8th, '05, 03:19

Stealth, we might have our differences but I have to admit
this was a nice piece of thought-splashin' and it of course inspired me :

Have you never wondered who in the end you'll be ?
Have you been to all kinds of troubles to really see ?
Or have you never thought of how the future could be ?
Have you just been dreaming, sitting under a tree ?
Or have you really worked hard to in the end leave it all be ?
and maybe imagined retiring on a boat at sea ?
Have you ever really used all of your energy ?
Have you ever had doubts on the worlds misery
or about what way the right way would be ?
Do you always taken action or you just wait and see ?
Did you ever have a brilliant lifesaving idea ?
Have you had opinions on how it should otherwise be ?
Have you ever had something with which you didn't agree
or always left this to people that made this their studie ?
Have you ever had a moment you just had to count till three ?
Have you ever thought "did I leave her or did she leave me ?".
Have you ever met a woman which who you could be ?
Have you thought of learning your kids their ABC
or never thought about growing the family-tree ?
Shit will always happen, just react and be,
dont be depressed, it all be oke, you'll see !
Have you never sneeked in the movies for free !?
Haven't you got a million chances ? Not 1,2 or 3...
Ain't most of us poor, sad and lonely but yet glad to be ?
All trying their best, actually just like you...And me ?

Which will of course never be news on late night BBC,
or whatever station on T.V...
(Exceptions there of course, like Marshall Mathers nr. 3)

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Postby 555555 » Nov 9th, '05, 02:21

That's some deep shit.
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