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Postby Rae » Feb 25th, '06, 00:33

aw i kinda see what you were sayin about my other one...about all the words... urs is REALLY good! you say this is the 1st verse? cant wait to hear the rest of it!!!
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Postby Ivy » Feb 25th, '06, 00:45

When will you be posting the other verses..this was very well thoughtout and I would like to see the rest....good shit right there... :smoking:
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"My life your entertainment, you watch it while I live it. I walk they folla (ay), I talk they holla (ay), just here for your amusement. My life your entertainment. you watch it while I live it. You waitin' for me to lose it, I guess I'm just here for your amusement..." ~ T.I. feat. Usher "My Life Your Entertainment"
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Postby Ivy » Feb 25th, '06, 01:02

Just over that one year I can notice a little difference and now there's a 3 year gap between the 1st verse and the 3rd..this is going to be interesting..my adive...is once you're finished...go through and make changes to the first two to make it all fit together and not show the difference in them..and make a chorus...just a suggestion though :sweating:
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Postby Ivy » Feb 25th, '06, 02:01

The third verse is alright..got some good stuff..but I like the other 2 verses better...I don't know why...so don't ask me to elaborate cause I won't be able to :whistle: :sweating: :whistle:
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"My life your entertainment, you watch it while I live it. I walk they folla (ay), I talk they holla (ay), just here for your amusement. My life your entertainment. you watch it while I live it. You waitin' for me to lose it, I guess I'm just here for your amusement..." ~ T.I. feat. Usher "My Life Your Entertainment"
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Postby Ivy » Feb 25th, '06, 02:12

Yeah there are some pretty good punchlines..but I still like the others none-the-less.................................................................................................
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