Protect Ya Neck Freestyle

by **DAngeloBailey** » Sep 6th, '13, 22:17

Hey guys! My name is Brent Parker. I'm 17 years old from South Carolina and I wanted to get your opinion on some of the music I've been working on. Here's a little taste of what I'm about. Any criticisms/advice is much appreciated!!

http://youtu.be/OItD4iOIWjE

edit: viewtopic.php?f=38&t=163011&start=15#p2310094

by **Just Silver** » Sep 6th, '13, 22:37

the rules are to give feedback on another members audio before submitting your own or itll be locked sorry i dont make the rules

Just givin the heads up :y:

by **Mr.DGAF** » Sep 6th, '13, 22:55

Damn homie, you got bars. Pretty nice voice too, you remind me A LOT of younger Slim. Flow was spastic, you killed that shit. I felt at times it got a little too repetitive flow wise, you switched it up in a few spots but then it was like faster again. You got some nice wordplay and schemes in there, that might've been part of why you remind me of Em. This was tight dude. Only real complaint is the punch ins were semi obvious. Like not to the point where it sounds awkward, but I could tell rather easily where they came. Just some shit to tighten up on though, no biggie.

And yeah dawg, you got to give somebody else feedback or this will get locked. There's a lot of pieces to choose from, but you should probably just feed this one: http://forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?f=38&t=163011

by **Eedee** » Sep 7th, '13, 00:15

Yeah, you need a feedback link. I'll re-open this once you do.

by **Eedee** » Sep 7th, '13, 01:58

And voila! Re-opened!

by **DAngeloBailey** » Sep 7th, '13, 02:02

Eedee wrote:And voila! Re-opened!

Haha thanks dude, that was my b. Imma newbie :happy:

by **Eedee** » Sep 7th, '13, 02:10

DAngeloBailey wrote:
Eedee wrote:And voila! Re-opened!

Haha thanks dude, that was my b. Imma newbie

Not to rappin', this song was tight, man.

by **ladelsofgravy** » Sep 7th, '13, 02:27

My opinion is mixed on this freestyle, but it leans toward positive. The voice sounds like stereotypical Screech whiteboy kind of thing, multis can sometimes get random, and sometimes the content borders hiphop cliches, but in the end, the flow, structure and pacing is so good, it's not so hard to forgive it's flaws.

by **MistaVijilantee** » Sep 7th, '13, 02:52

Lol, ironically I just wrote my own version of this last night.
Anyway, I really, really enjoyed your flow.
Even if your lyrics sucked - which they didn't - I still think it'd be pleasant to listen too.
Great choice in beat, nice lyricism.
This was solid bro, although I'd like to see more than just "bars" in future.

by **Eedee** » Sep 7th, '13, 07:35

I'd like to second that. You had a nice tempo and flow going on, I could hear your delivery was good too. Your voice wasn't as bad as I thought after a second listen. I heard multis in there (yay lol). Good shit, man.

by **mdemaz** » Sep 8th, '13, 14:37

Wow, that was rather impressive.
It's not often that young new members just come out with some dope shit.

Might wanna work on just tightening up your style and you should be good to go.

It's a yes from me.

by **Flamez** » Sep 14th, '13, 18:10

That was a tight freestyle man I loved the fkn flow on this shit. It was tight.

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