A verse of mine

[Tomer666]

Oh well, I'm not that much of a good rapper to be honest, I just started getting around it a while ago and I just started actually getting serious with it just about a week ago. I'm still a newbie and I got much to learn, hence I am posting this here to get some criticism.

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Link: https://soundcloud.com/tomer666/old-school-rap

Lyrics:

When I'm rapping they still ain't saying it's fire
But in the future I'll be a person you admire
I'm a person to believe in so place your investments
I'm not bullshitting, what I say is a statement
I swear to god I'm going to murder this track
I got the skills, you know I'm still half black
It could be in my genes and it could be in my soul
But regardless of that all, Em's the best you'll ever know
Kanye used to be normal until he met Kim
I could believe he let this bitch blow his dick
But then he married her and things went wrong
Lost control on a show, struck his head in a pole
I guess he should have left her, I guess he should abandon
But now that she's pregnant it's too late to awaken
But hey Kanye, there's no point in crying
You gave her the D, now it's time she meets mine

[sneakerheadshady]

im dead serious, your accent makes this really cool. even speaking a second language (im guessing) you rap really well and flow great, i also like the beat

[Tomer666]

To be honest I expected rather negative comments in regards to my accent and yes it is my second language.
Thanks a lot, much appreciated!