It's Been A Long Time, Mr. Rogers

[EvryOnesACrtc]

My second recording. I feel like I've got my lyrics down, just need to work on my vocals. Anyway, I'd love any kind of feedback.

https://soundcloud.com/arshenal-1/its-b ... -mr-rogers

Lyrics:
people tell me "just go be yourself",/
Then, when I do I get thrown into jail/
I'm a chauvinist male who’s got first class tickets to be flown in to hell /
my mind refuses to try a logical thought/
cuz my brain hasn't caught up to my biological clock/
maniacal, with a diabolical plot/
a criminal mastermind sendin' subliminal advertisements to leave you in psychological shock/
The tension gets thick 'soon as I enter this bitch/
cuz 'good' is like an awful stench I resist, has me clenchin' my fists/
and 'evil's' a thirst that I quench when I'm pissed, have you drenched in the mist/
it's like I enter dementia and go into my own dimension, with twists/
where revenge is a bitch, but vengeance is bliss!/
I’m an insensitive prick, my intentions are sick!/
repentin' my sins? fuck, tell Satan to take a seat on the bench, I insist/
'till I'm sentenced to death I'll act upon my paranoias/
cuz you don't gotta be clairvoyance/
to know that the whole world's goin' to hell, care to join us?/

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[Eedee]

That was a fun listen, man. Nice.

I do feel like you have lyrics down as you said, but your flow is timid at times and not as confident as I feel you can be. If that makes sense.

Practice makes perfect.

[EvryOnesACrtc]

I agree with you 100% about the practice. This was literally my second time, ever, on the mic. I gotta figure out my style and voice. Thanks for the feedback. I'll look out for your stuff.