Errything's OK

[EvryOnesACrtc]

I've just recently gotten into recording. I've been posting in the CW section for years though. Since I am a beginner, I only recorded something small. I don't think I'm quite ready for an entire song with full on choruses just yet. Anyway, I'm open to hearing any kind of criticism to improve.

https://soundcloud.com/arshenal-1/errythings-ok

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[Jaba]

Actually. I loved it. Great story-telling and mixing. Creative song!

[EvryOnesACrtc]

Actually. I loved it. Great story-telling and mixing. Creative song!

Haha I wouldn't consider it a song by any means--more like a snippet--but, still, thanks!

[Mr.DGAF]

Damn haha, you chose a creative way to introduce yourself to AS. Wasn't really feeling some of the effects haha, and the quality wasn't great but I'm not a stickler for that. Like the beat a lot. Some of the delivery at the beginning was odd sounding, you kinda slurred the "bickering" line. Like the ad libs, especially the "oooh I cried". Your voice is really unique, you actually sounded kinda like my my man Jaba vocally at the very beginning. I felt your delivery got much better as the verse went a long; it straightened out and didn't fluctuate quite as much as the beginning. Was a solid start, look forward to hearing more.

[EvryOnesACrtc]

Damn haha, you chose a creative way to introduce yourself to AS. Wasn't really feeling some of the effects haha, and the quality wasn't great but I'm not a stickler for that. Like the beat a lot. Some of the delivery at the beginning was odd sounding, you kinda slurred the "bickering" line. Like the ad libs, especially the "oooh I cried". Your voice is really unique, you actually sounded kinda like my my man Jaba vocally at the very beginning. I felt your delivery got much better as the verse went a long; it straightened out and didn't fluctuate quite as much as the beginning. Was a solid start, look forward to hearing more.

Yeah, I know what you mean. I was hoping the little things that were wrong were just me nitpicking, but since you're pointing it out the discrepancies must be there. I only recorded my vocals once and didn't look back haha in retrospect, I should have did some retakes. Anyway, thanks for the feed. I'll post some more stuff soon. In the meantime, check out my written in the CW section.

[Eedee]

Wat.

I'm not quite sure what was going on haha. The effects were pretty cool, kinda muddled your rapping, but I'm sure that was part of the intent, not being heard over the parents' arguments. Nice rhymes in there, vocal presence is better than a lot of first timers I've heard here. Definitely excited to hear your improvements song-to-song.