eXceL- Next Level Freestyle

[eXceL]

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Hey guys my name is eXceL and I am a rapper/singer/producer from a group called Freshset, im relatively new on here but ive been doing music since 2005 ish, let me know what you think about this verse, its over a track that you all should be familiar with, any feedback would be appreciated.

https://soundcloud.com/excel-7/next-level-freestyle

Headaches like brain quakes when rain makes me fall/ I claim hate, miss take few for what they are/ i mean/ who coulda figured a nigga bigger like richer dinners/ when I'm still feelin like turtles disciplined by splinter/ sewer bound, so sound is somewhat underground/ was never found, so fuck who they was lookin for/ I'm cookin more, till they explore my excess/ skill and reckless raw rhymes like bed sex/ like headsets/ I be all up in ya ears/ and here's to where you would decide that you'd care to/ invest up in this lyrical jest/ cuz the kid is on point like the middle of a breast/ back like Hess/ to gas these sets/ with athlete strength/ with math defense/ so the numbers make sense/ and even if they dont I would pass the pretest/ like a pee test/ one of the best that's left

[Strictt Ame]

pretty dope, not gonna slam the quality since its a freestyle..flow was solid, content was on point..some of the metas were played out but overall a nice drop..interesting writing style, but it works for you so keep it up

[eXceL]

thanks for the feedback man, i really appreciate your time. what do you mean by writing style? the way i physically wrote the words, or the way i rhyme them ?

[Strictt Ame]

paragraph form instead of traditional line form, not too many people write like that anymore..used to be everybody wrote that way

[Slim Fiasco]

AWesome stuff man, I loved that.

[Spyder]

sounds real nice man, flow and delivery was great. id like to hear an actual track from ya

[eXceL]

paragraph form instead of traditional line form, not too many people write like that anymore..used to be everybody wrote that way

oh ok i see what ur saying, I never really thought to write in what i call poetic form, it takes up more space imo, maybe i should try it out, might give a different thought process.


to everyone else, thanks for your time and feedback, i definitely appreciate it