(EVT R2) Bigray vs. Trimss

[Trimss]

Like which lines? I know i half assdd it but normally it should rhyme.

Father doesn't rhyme well with after
Your 'most proud' line didn't rhyme with anything

I mean basically every line man

Really? I agree about father and after, it's a stretched rhyme after all. And I'm not saying my rhyming was better than Ray's or even that it was great, but saying every line doesn't rhyme is kinda harsh lol.

don't get me madder cuz time is supposed to heal
but it's really an ennemy who's too close and mean
I've been willing to die with no feelings inside
but I chose to breath they say make him proud
but he's now deceased I can't live with ease
Jealous of them other kids, crying everyday
but leaving when my mother did, on some other shit

And I know it doesn't perfectly rhyme, but "him proud" goes well with "inside." Even though I agree my rhyming wasn't as good as usual, and it's probably because I tried different structures and just rhymed without proof reading or changing anything. I did it in one take, as the inspiration came so it's a little bit weird and have an awkward structure, but there are some rhymes lol

[Trimss]

That's true too, even though i check the pronunciation on sites such as google. Biut yeah, that too.

[CrashBand]

"Father" and "after" do rhyme in a lot of accents.

It annoys me how all you yanks say after/last/grass/bastard.

I need to get on that UK ish.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=AIyHCiB-ZPg#t=1m20s

I got master degree burns after a heatstroke of genius.

[Spyder]

ego needs to vote on these battles tbh

[Just Silver]

i agree these battles need to be voted on i dont see why its so difficult

[CrashBand]

I'm happy to be one.

[Trimss]

Yeah, it would be nice if you were the tie breaker because it could stay like that for days if no one does it.

[Trimss]

Thanks bro, good luck too!

[AbramIsaac]

Geno asked me to be the tie-breaker earlier today...probably before CrashBand offered to judge, but since I already wrote my review, I thought I'd go ahead and put in my vote.

(5) Conveying Emotion - Trimss
Bigray's was emotional on content, but the narrative might have made it a little abstract. Trimss' was a more emotional piece.
(3) Strength Of Concept - bigray
Bigray's concept was direct and straight forward, the narrative moved in a more cohesive way than Trimss' to me.
(3) Rhyming / Multies - bigray
Trimss' rhyming was a little off. I took into account the accent differences, and pronounced the words the way I think Trimss intended them to sound. Still, the pairs weren't always there, and the change ups in end rhymes threw me off a time or two. Bigray's rhyming was on point, and consistent for most of the bars.
(3) Flow - Trimss
This one could have went either way. Trimss didn't have the strongest flow, but I feel like bigray might have packed a little too much into the bars to fit the beat. While I was able to make it work most times, there were others that were just too full to really fit the beat and make the flow consistent.
(2) Vocab / Complex - bigray
Bigray's vocabulary on this one was a little more complex than Trimss. Being that Trimss isn't a native English speaker, there's no shame in that, but bigray definitely took this part.
(1) Lasting Impact - Trimss
I think this ties into the conveying emotion as well...maybe it's just because his was more personal. It sticks with me more...bigray's was an emotional topic, but it doesn't stick with me as well. I don't think it was because it was about someone else, but rather that the execution of the idea didn't strike me was well as Trimss.

Trimss - 9
bigray - 8