by Emadyville » Nov 8th, '10, 05:38
Ok I fed this in a word doc so I could just copy paste, so I'll give my overall feed first (sidenote, I only listened to your verses). Overall I found this to be inconsistent, many songs you had some real strong parts, then parts that lacked flow or lyrics. Your rhyming was solid, it seemed like a mix between rhyming to rhyme, and rhyming cause you can rhyme...as in, I know you can rhyme well, and some parts the rhymes seemed to fit and be dope, and other parts, sometimes in the same songs it seemed more rhyming to rhyme, or rhyming to sound complex, it wasn't bad, and to any non-rapper listening I'm sure they wouldn't pick that up. The songs themselves overall had very similar feels, it felt at a point like I was hearing the same songs over, minus the handfull of songs that stood out, and they stood out cause of the content. Your flow was pretty solid, but the slip ups, meaning the inconsistent feel to it brought this down a lot. And delivery wise, you sounded pretty much the same throughout, nothing stood out except your shit on the letter to my fans, and those verses were dope, which really brought down the rest cause I know you can have different/better deliveries, but you just didn't use them. Here's my feed for all your songs, again, only for your verses.
Who Dat?- Make it out to cash line was dope, the speed up part was nice but the parts ahead of that that were sped up lost a little energy so more delivery than anything was a little down on that, overall I liked just a long ass verse for an intro, lyrics were good till about halfway then they kinda made me lose interest.
Birth Of a Hero- love this beat, delivery is lacking on this cause this beats so high energy, picks up tho around 50 seconds, second verse is much better than the first, flow tho kinda lacks on this it seems to be more over the place and not consistent, this beat I think is one where a hook doesn’t work cause it all sounds the same, didn’t even think it was a hook when I heard it. Started off the last verse strong but fell off quick, picked it back up and the flow as well, but the middle slipped up hard. I wish you woulda did something to make the hook stand out more, overall sounded like a filler track.
Letter To My Fans- Haha stan beat, this should be interesting. Your flow on this is pretty cool, lyrics were pretty dope and fitting, the eagle pigeon line was good, good to see you put some energy in there near the end, very cool verse, loved this actually, which it wasn’t just a verse. Good thing I didn’t cut this off haha, last verse is dope too, lyrics were solid again, rhymes were cool. Delivery shined on both your verses, and was probably the best on this whole mixtape. I enjoyed this, concept was dope.
All Day-I like your flow on this, cool rhyming, words are slightly mushed together tho so some shits hard to understand. Pretty boring overall, didn’t seem to have any energy on this.
Suckonmycockaonetime- I like the acapella idea, but you slowing the flow for some of this makes this sound like shit, good delivery tho on this, and you picked it up the second half, this is more how I wish the rest was, outro is mad annoying now with the whole suck it bitch thing lol.
If I Die- Hooks dope on this, idk why but I love it. Your flow a few bars into this is real good, and overall is real good on this, delivery picks up a lot near the end, good ending to your verse. Overall I enjoyed this a lot.
Suck It Bitch- Flow is decent, the pick up was nice, when the beat switches you sounded much better, hook I think woulda been better only once, maybe twice, but 3 times is too much imo, second verse is real cool, love the lyrics on this, when the beat switches tho you lost it, opposite of the first verse lol. Overall your verses were pretty enjoyable.
Been So Long- Love your lyrics from the second half of this verse on, hate this hook, I don’t mind it just kind of annoying. Second verse is just as good content wise, def enjoyed it. Third verse, good also. Overall I loved the lyrics on this, thought the delivery was decent, maybe coulda had a little more emotion, and the flow was simple but def worked and fit this song, great job on this.
Fourth of July- Dope flow on this, really stands out, lyrics are consistent, def keeping my interest, good rhymes on this as well. Delivery is solid, woulda liked to see you switch something up on this tho cause of its length, intro kinda sucked but overall this was real nice. Outro is fuckin true too haha liked that shit.
Days Like This- Flow slips slightly cause I can tell a few lines your pausing seems to not flow, if that makes sense. Like the lyrics tho, hook is pretty cool on this tho. Flow really slips on the second verse when you trying to do that talking stuff, picks up afterwards tho and is much better, and lyrics picked up as well. Third verse, flow is good, when the beat switches it sounds much better on the flow, like the lyrics. Overall this was pretty dope, delivery coulda been better, lyrics were tight, few slips on flow but some parts it was real good. Wish this was more consistent, dope beat by mart as well.
Party It Up- I like what your saying in this first verse, flow was dope until the end of this it slipped some, hook isn’t too bad, your breathing on it kinda takes something away tho. Second verse, didn’t like this at all, started cool but after the first 2 bars it just was boring. Third verse, like what you do with the structure of rhyming, flow is dope, this verse stands out cause of the flow and lyrics, but you kinda fall off second half, and bring it up again near the end. Again wish it was more consistent. Not sure what to think of this, the concept I don’t really get, the title and hook with the lyrics seemed to make sense half the time, which kind of makes this song seem to not be written that well. Other than that the shit I liked made this a cool track.
Cruise Control- First verse is real boring, the beat doesn’t seem to fit what you saying with your lyrics and delivery. Hook is the best part so far, liked the cruise control parts, the other parts tho kinda took away from this, so it coulda been better. Second verse, George Clooney line was nice, your flow seems to fall off when you start for the first half and picks up second half.
Egotistical- Like the intro, real true imo. Flow is pretty cool, but the pauses seem off, like you slightly stumble up, but the second half you pick it up, love the lyrics tho on this. The hooks lyrics are good, but it sounds like shit. Second verse, lyrics are good again, flows better on this, tho there are some pauses that again make it sound off, I’m starting to think this bneat doesn’t fit you very well. Overall lyrics and concept were good, inconsistency on this brings it down tho.
D'Evils 2010- beats dope on this, voice change on your shit sounds like shit, your verse starts off pretty good, flow is nice, lyrics fit this very well, hooks pretty cool on this. Overall, the voice changing shit in the beginning of your verse was bad, in your verse more tho it sounded better and more fitting.
Mister Big Bad Wolf- Flows nice on this, rhyme structure works well with your flow, lyrics are pretty interesting, def enjoying this first verse. Hooks pretty cool, like the drag out on words, sounds good. Second verse, flow is dope, lyrics are real cool, a few parts you rushed and it jumbled words, other than that this verse is real dope. Third verse, flow isn’t as solid, but not bad, lyrics again are pretty cool and fitting, delivery lacks some on this sounds like the speed had you caught up some. Overall I liked this track a lot.
Light Up- This delay between verses then the redo is real boring, the lyrics aren’t really fitting your delivery just could be stronger, the flow is pretty good on this, liked the slant rhymes on this made some shit stick out more, ending was dope, but up until then it picked up as it went along but coulda been stronger the first half of your verse.
Say Hello To Winter- Fed this
Mercisless- Flow is fast and is dope, but your delivery lacks and your breathing makes some words sound jumbled and some pronunciation isn’t on point, some of this sounds like you reading the lyrics and fucked up as you reading it. Overall, flows good, but the other shit brought this down a lot.
Shadows- Your delivery is really weak on this, it’s like your lyrics just don’t fit what you’re saying and made this first verse very boring. Second verse, sounds like shit and the lyrics are pretty shitty. Didn’t like this at all.
What You Expect- You sound bored as hell on this, lyrics even seem like you just wrote this real quick. The hook is fitting, good lyrics and I liked the flow on it but it doesn’t sound good at all. Second verse picks up and the lyrics are more interesting, but they fall off pretty quick, this just sounds so boring.
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I love you Daren
