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DOPE, ur time has come

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DOPE, ur time has come

Postby DarkMan » Mar 16th, '06, 13:56

okay, the rules are there are no rules....its first up to 5.......ppl vote plzz!!!

ive come to put this motherfucker in his place
always see him talking wack, ima put a bullet in his face
u aint nothing dawg, ur nothing but a piece of shit
i feel like im wasting my time with these lines i spit
but i couldnt keep my feelings inside no more
coz u think ur the only one who can keep it raw
u might as well just turn around and take a bag of coke
coz ur rhymes aint nothin but a fuckin joke
how u gonna respond dawg, ive already killed u twice
wit these lines i spit, u aint even a tenth of obie trice
so turn around now, and forget that this was ever happenin'
youll now think twice about doing some more battlin'..BIATCH!!
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Postby polluted » Mar 16th, '06, 14:40

dont call urself a rapper cuz u spit shit n u weak to understand what u writing is takin a weak
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Postby DOPE » Mar 16th, '06, 15:03

yo this guy,, wantsta battle ima puncture his eye
leave it ruptured, n mashed to die
im comin thru like Jason i got a mask on
when i slit thru your chest, all i see is a tampon
flip you, i stamp a stamp on, your fuckin gaping ass
u cant match this, its so hot , u'll think that satan raps
dont piss me off,ima cut ur wirst open n pull ur artiries out
u be sayin, a thug is hard to be now
when i rap i'll get it, its the wrap,
i shitted
DARKMAN up in a battle rap?ima use him to wipe my ass crack, ,,,,,,
after the crap is spitted
n u sayin u already killed me twice
how the fuck dawg?, that line was cool as litin a fire up on ice
puttin a fuckin bullet in my face, yeah tape it to nose
thats the only way u can do that, u got YOURself exposed
u gunna explode, dark man, u like my fart dam!
i start and, just end u as soon as i do, i hit u a lyricall dart man!!!
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Make you satanistic
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N place the clip N cock it back
N let it go until your brains are rippin out your skull so bad
To sew you back would be a waste of stitches


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Postby DOPE » Mar 16th, '06, 15:09

hey that line i wrote is acttually "to MY nose" not "to nose" i was wrrting fast so made that mistake,,,, so let the voting begin now
"It's amazing that the amount of news that happens in the world every day always just exactly fits the newspaper."

My basic disk will make you take a razor to your wrist
Make you satanistic
Make you take the pistol to your face
N place the clip N cock it back
N let it go until your brains are rippin out your skull so bad
To sew you back would be a waste of stitches


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Postby polluted » Mar 16th, '06, 15:17

wen u tryna rap its so fucking pathetic
yeah u did shitted, ryt in ya pants wen posted ur shit
dont fuckin come back or imma make scheme on a new prosthetics
wen i fuckin rip ya hand n leg off and cauterize ya skin
Seems like ua poppin pills or sittin on crack or n E
cuz u really hard to comprehend if wen u slow enogh for every1 to glee
Close ya mug cuz polluted is in da house
Sever ya tongue out piss on it and send it to ya moms
So she could fix on her chain ryt on her blouse
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Postby polluted » Mar 16th, '06, 15:27

sorry for buttin in
just boooooooooooored
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Postby DOPE » Mar 16th, '06, 16:03

yo mayn Polluted dawg, let the battle be mayn,,, let them votes come in,,, dawg, its DOPE VS DARKMAN

it aint no triangle shit
"It's amazing that the amount of news that happens in the world every day always just exactly fits the newspaper."

My basic disk will make you take a razor to your wrist
Make you satanistic
Make you take the pistol to your face
N place the clip N cock it back
N let it go until your brains are rippin out your skull so bad
To sew you back would be a waste of stitches


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Postby polluted » Mar 16th, '06, 16:16

ait ait man, no problems
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Re: DOPE, ur time has come

Postby walend » Mar 16th, '06, 17:22

DarkMan wrote:okay, the rules are there are no rules....its first up to 5.......ppl vote plzz!!!

ive come to put this motherfucker in his place
always see him talking wack, ima put a bullet in his face
u aint nothing dawg, ur nothing but a piece of shit
i feel like im wasting my time with these lines i spit
but i couldnt keep my feelings inside no more
coz u think ur the only one who can keep it raw
u might as well just turn around and take a bag of coke
coz ur rhymes aint nothin but a fuckin joke
how u gonna respond dawg, ive already killed u twice
wit these lines i spit, u aint even a tenth of obie trice
so turn around now, and forget that this was ever happenin'
youll now think twice about doing some more battlin'..BIATCH!!


not bad but, these word ALL rappers use, to me these words are done :happy:
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Postby LDPR » Mar 16th, '06, 18:09

not bad but, these word ALL rappers use, to me these words are done


True that, true that..
..Jesus Christ, if your that much of a gangster, put the mic down
You should be out killin motherfuckers right now
Kill a motherfucker dead, kill'em dead bitch ......Shady4life
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Postby $0 R3@L » Mar 16th, '06, 18:17

DARKMAN WROTE:

ive come to put this motherfucker in his place
always see him talking wack, ima put a bullet in his face
u aint nothing dawg, ur nothing but a piece of shit
i feel like im wasting my time with these lines i spit
but i couldnt keep my feelings inside no more
coz u think ur the only one who can keep it raw
u might as well just turn around and take a bag of coke
coz ur rhymes aint nothin but a fuckin joke
how u gonna respond dawg, ive already killed u twice
wit these lines i spit, u aint even a tenth of obie trice
so turn around now, and forget that this was ever happenin'
youll now think twice about doing some more battlin'..BIATCH!!


'u might as well just turn around and take a bag of coke
coz ur rhymes aint nothin but a fuckin joke'


weak punchline this is the case throughtout the verse.

the layout to your verse is clean however your verse didnt exactly make me jump for joy.Was just standard stuff said.Try addressing dope.At the moment you could use your verse on anyone.You called out dope so you obviously got a problem,address those problems.

DOPE WROTE:

yo this guy,, wantsta battle ima puncture his eye
leave it ruptured, n mashed to die
im comin thru like Jason i got a mask on
when i slit thru your chest, all i see is a tampon
flip you, i stamp a stamp on, your fuckin gaping ass
u cant match this, its so hot , u'll think that satan raps
dont piss me off,ima cut ur wirst open n pull ur artiries out
u be sayin, a thug is hard to be now
when i rap i'll get it, its the wrap,
i shitted
DARKMAN up in a battle rap?ima use him to wipe my ass crack, ,,,,,,
after the crap is spitted
n u sayin u already killed me twice
how the fuck dawg?, that line was cool as litin a fire up on ice
puttin a fuckin bullet in my face, yeah tape it to nose
thats the only way u can do that, u got YOURself exposed
u gunna explode, dark man, u like my fart dam!
i start and, just end u as soon as i do, i hit u a lyricall dart man!!!


this is alot better in terms of form and lyrics.Punchlines aitn exactly 'stop the show this cats dead' but some good ones.I did liek this one:

'flip you, i stamp a stamp on, your fuckin gaping ass
u cant match this, its so hot , u'll think that satan raps'


however your layout on the rap is very messy.its like one long sentence then a two word sentence.


Overall both verses aint nothing special however dope wins this one.Darkman verse,although there wernt nothing wrong,there was also nothing right.Dope wins it on basis of attempting to use wider vocabulary and at least attempt to personalise the rap to the person he is battling.


DOPE WINS!
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Postby Mc Cubz » Mar 16th, '06, 23:59

I agree wid everfin so real said
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Postby guess whos back... » Mar 20th, '06, 11:02

dope wins
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