(3) Punchlines- NWO- the Fidel and Soprano ones were better than any in The Eminem Show's verse.
(3) Personals-Tie- neither were that personal, but the general ones used were pretty good on both sides.
(2) Multies- NWO- no explanation necessary.
(1) Flow- NWO- seemed to go more smoothly as I read it.
(1) Structure- Tie- Both are pretty similar, only difference is NWO had longer lines, but they still lined up.
(1) Vocab/Complex- NWO- was better in both fields.
(1) Other- Vintageness Factor- NWO- your verse reminded me of a few older battlers who no longer post here.
12-4 No Way OutNWO- Geat verse. You're new to the site, but it's clear you have experience battling. I can't offer much advice here, because you seem experienced enough to know what you're doing. I'm not a fan of capitalizing things mid-line, but that's just a personal preference. Keep doing your thing.
The Eminem Show- Your verse was good, but a lot can be improved. I'm not sure how long you've been battling for, but it seems like it hasn't been long. Don't take offense to this, it's not a bad thing. Sometimes you're put up against people who are more experienced than you. This helps you improve. You need to work on a lot of skills, but if you take the time to continue battling/writing, they should develop in time. If you need anything explained, ask, and I shall try to help you out. If you like battling, keep at it and you'll get better.
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