New Rap

[Slim86]

I was just messing around and freestlylin on some girl and she went out with this kid and she found out he was gay and his name was andrew and i thought this was pretty good. The first line i think is the best I've ever had lol the rap speaks the truth i have no business trying to rap. Tell me what you guys think. I thought it was good for a kid like me.

calm cool collected and incredibally chilled
i am under hyped and incredibly skilled
im a little white boy with read hair from woodsdale
and i rap like im a black kid from the hood still
i know i may be fat rad haired and not get much pussy
but id never go near andrew the wussy

[Slim86]

yea lol i know its short but it was really good for me i cant even right a poem and get a decent grade let alone freestyle.

[Gatman50]

yo slim who u tryin to be vanilla ice or milli vanilli
damn rights ur chilled cause ur raps are juss chilly
you say ur like a black from the hood
well son with a lil practise maybe you could
you also say ur fat and u dont get any twat
common u can do better show me what u got
this aint a diss just trying to lite a fire
common let it roar and put it on the wire
or maybe u are a wussy and would rather eat andrews pussy


Common jab back u know u wanna

[hot_dogg]

lol ur newbie, it wasnt bad, but read a rhyme dictionnary or something, trust me it helps

btw the colour red, is spelled red, not read

[Mc Cubz]

trus me hes right a rhyme dictionary does help. If you jus read around them, when you flow you have more vocabulary that rhymes an can have more complex multi rhymes. Also you should try linkin lines together with a rhyme. thats jus advise hope it helps yo