A Twisted Christmas

[shadyblogger]

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So Christmas is coming up
Does that mean all the world's problems are gonna go away, nope.
Will the ass of J. Lo deflate till it's the size of a bass note
But I don't want it smaller, that's right you better say no
Cuz girl we'll be fucking till it's day four (pronounced foh)
Even on your period I'll screw you so bad while I scream hey ho
And have you moaning till it's January 8th oh
You don't like it when I go fast I think I need a fucking chill pill
Preacher can you teach me the 5 point palm so I can fucking Kill Bill
You goddamn right I still will
Even if I have to scream "can't you just hold still Bill"
This will only take a minute in the mean time I'll still bill
You for the office visit and taking up my time
That's right this is time I could be spending sipping on a Mai Thai
While I spend money for you to go take Muay Thai
So you can fight off the guys in your fly by night
Hooker operation when they get too rough and make you ripped like a nice white dyke
Oh my God my fucking eyesight
I can't see the paper anymore what I can say
I done said everything I wanted to say in this little rhyme bitch
And you're looking fine bitch
I'm gonna have to give you a fine which
Will cost you a cut so you have a nice stitch
Across your right tit
I'm sorry bitch was I too mean tonight shit
Go get your comfort blanket like Linus
Cuz this is a Charlie Brown Christmas (pronounced Christ-miss)
I think we're in a fucking crisis
Cuz as far as I diss, I still think there's someone I missed
And as far as sucking my dick goes, No cuts, you better get in the fucking line bitch

[Just Silver]

Decent rhyming had an odd flow and some weird adjectives but it's all good lol

Didn't care for the ill bill kill still rhymes but otherwise I liked it
Sorta sporadic and got off topic if this was supposed to have one

Try and stick to a subject I have the same problem lol even if its a keystyle
Just keep going forward

[shadyblogger]

Decent rhyming had an odd flow and some weird adjectives but it's all good lol

Didn't care for the ill bill kill still rhymes but otherwise I liked it
Sorta sporadic and got off topic if this was supposed to have one

Try and stick to a subject I have the same problem lol even if its a keystyle
Just keep going forward

Thanks bro. Yeah with the first line or 2 I thought I was gonna do a serious verse about how the world is messed up and all this sad stuff. But then I just started going sporadic and it turned into a crazy, silly verse. One of these days I'll write a serious verse that is on topic and not sporadic. I just seem to have a lot of fun with these fun and light, crazy verses. And thanks for the feedback again man

The content is sort of all over the place, but the lyrics are well written and there are some humorous parts. You seem talented. I respect that.

Thanks bro. Yeah I'd like to be able to do crazy, random verses like this and also be able to do serious, focused verses. Thank you