Do Not Kill Me

[Jaba]

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Single from a all Greg Booth Beats (love his beats, and their beats you wouldnt think id rap too) EP. I wanted to experiment with this song since Ive never really rapped on a beat like this before. Ill probs never rap on a beat like this again either. I dont wanna rap for a living, this is just a hobby/for fun. Feedback is welcome tho cus i wanna get better. Thanks for checking this out

Credits -
Me for all lyrics/mixing/recording
Greg Booth for the beat

Link - https://soundcloud.com/jaba2/do-not-kill-me

Feedback/constructive criticism is welcome!

LOF - viewtopic.php?f=38&t=175093

[TotalEminemFanboy]

Man I love to hear fellow people who just rap for the fun of it and do it because they enjoy it.

My thoughts:

Your lyrics are aight, and I like how you ride on the beat, it's chill. I can tell you're really enthusiastic and had fun with the song, it really shows.

Your actual rapping is decent, I feel like it can always improve, but hey, not too bad! Your voice is interesting, sounds like you're like in your early teens or so because your voice isn't that deep, and I feel like if your voice was slightly deeper it would add to the flow and sound overall. I did like the bars you dropped though.

The only thing I didn't like was the chorus hahaha it was pretty wack tbh. I have no clue what you're saying and it made me just start laughing out loud xDDDD all in all though, I like your rapping! You should try out some more traditional beats and see what you can pull off.

Keep having fun man, the more you do the better you get.

[Jaba]

Man I love to hear fellow people who just rap for the fun of it and do it because they enjoy it.

My thoughts:

Your lyrics are aight, and I like how you ride on the beat, it's chill. I can tell you're really enthusiastic and had fun with the song, it really shows.

Your actual rapping is decent, I feel like it can always improve, but hey, not too bad! Your voice is interesting, sounds like you're like in your early teens or so because your voice isn't that deep, and I feel like if your voice was slightly deeper it would add to the flow and sound overall. I did like the bars you dropped though.

The only thing I didn't like was the chorus hahaha it was pretty wack tbh. I have no clue what you're saying and it made me just start laughing out loud xDDDD all in all though, I like your rapping! You should try out some more traditional beats and see what you can pull off.

Keep having fun man, the more you do the better you get.

LOL yea... I didnt know what to do with the chorus and i was listening to mbdtf and i was like fuck it, lets try to make my voice sound like a chorus off that/rihanna? lol lmao. I say "do not kill me do not kill me please do not kill me! use your strength to pul yourself out of this horrible dark place".

THanks for the feed man! Yea im 17 not early teens but i hit my growth spurt late (15). but yea thanks! Whats ur fav verse since u said u like my "bars"?



BTW I LOVE YOUR AVATAR

[TotalEminemFanboy]

I will provide more feedback later, gotta go get dinner real quick! Lol brb.

[Dawid]

You're a great rapper for a 10 year old, I'm impressed.

[MUSIC_FEIN]

You have good energy and the lyrics arent too bad. Biggest concern is the beat choice for what your talking about just doesnt match it. A proper beat would make the overall concept sound more natural, your lyrics just dont go with your flow and delivery because it sounds forced on that beat. Keep working bro, practice makes perfect.

Btw, I posted a couple of my songs (under PlayWryte) if you want to go check them out and leave feedback.

Thanks!

[Jaba]

You have good energy and the lyrics arent too bad. Biggest concern is the beat choice for what your talking about just doesnt match it. A proper beat would make the overall concept sound more natural, your lyrics just dont go with your flow and delivery because it sounds forced on that beat. Keep working bro, practice makes perfect.

Btw, I posted a couple of my songs (under PlayWryte) if you want to go check them out and leave feedback.

Thanks!

I chose that beat cus I wanted to experiment. Thats why im doing this new EP

@theguywhocalledmea10yearold your just upset cus SL got shut down. Fuck off.

[MUSIC_FEIN]

Well I do applaud and respect artists who experiment and go outside their norm.

[Jaba]

Well I do applaud and respect artists who experiment and go outside their norm.

Thanks man

If u got time check out my "Redemption EP"

[MUSIC_FEIN]

Will do! And definitely check out the two songs I have posted as well "Draft Day Remix" and "Bite My Tongue".....leave a comment too!

[Mezdux]

Terrible.

[Jaba]

Terrible.

Thanks for the feedback man

[Mezdux]

Terrible.

Thanks for the feedback man

did ew jus fuckin diss me
fuk dis ama diss u

[Atone]

you sound like a nerdy kid who stumbled into a recording studio all alone and decided to make a couple songs before somebody found you,

you don't have the voice, or if you do, you just havn't found it yet, you sound way to weird, this is me saying this, one of the most hated rappers on TR, i'[m not saying give up, i'm saying keep going, keep trying, but work on getting better, link up with somebody that knows what they are doing and have them help you

i'm currently taking alot of notes and getting alot of help from Demaz and Eedee, i know i can do better, and so can you

[Atone]

Most people just don't have a rap voice. That's why most people fail.

if you pitch a voice a bit and layer it, sometimes it can work, but Jaba just sounds like one of those super nerdy kids in high school

kinda like, Mclovin from Superbad...exept Mclovin didn't make me want to punch him in the throat