Everything I Say

[Eedee]

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Eedee
EVERYTHING I SAY
(Prod. by Pyth Wonder)

[Verse 1]
What if I died right now...?
And I never left this state again?
What if it's like I'm proud?
Maybe then I could just focus on settling this crazy shit
I need to think outside the box,
Cause now I unlock this fucking cage and with
This opportunity? I won't miss again.
Shit, go figure it out, since...

Everything I say just links back to this
See life there? Yeah - I think that's a bitch
Sick tracks, so switch back, and this bastard kid
Will never stop it, I'd rather shrink wrap my dick
I'm mean when I say that I say what I mean
I keep everyday marked, because I'm chasin' a dream
Damn, ain't it a bitch?
The album cover should be my face when I'm takin' a shit
And I'm makin' it big...

[Interlude 1]
Walking on the beach with the sand under my feet
Makes realize how weak I really am
Every week that goes by I lose a bit of myself
I sit and I yell but no one hears my voice
Black and white, black and white
Turn till it clicks if you fear the noise
Satellite, satellite,
I can see them move when I star-gaze

[Verse 2]
I'm barely fused, cause anything you say or do
Could case me to flip, I refuse to raise this roof
Did they cage you too
And threw you away?
Can't look you in the face, can't do what it takes
To strike you as someone who has it together
I've been damaged forever so how do I manage my health cause
I've damned it to hell and it's resulted in this...
It's more worth it if it's worth it for less...

My best is something I haven't peaked at yet,
Haven't checked at all to see if I reached that debt
You can beat back anything if you're trying your hardest
Or least I was told, fuck, they just lied from the start of
My life, you know what? Maybe I'll empty a clip
Into a side of a building if you tempt me to flip
And if you get me to give a shit, nice job
I've come to write songs that'll bite off space and stop time

[Interlude 2]
It's a small world they say
But when I drive five miles to work
Compared to the seven thousand, nine hundred and eighteen
Mile diameter of the earth
I find myself gawking at the fact
That we are small compared to the
Eight hundred, sixty four thousand three hundred and twenty seven
Mile diameter of the sun
Light takes eight minutes to get here
Five minutes to get to work
Don't even get me started on the Milky Way

[Verse 3]
I wish I hadn't seen others on magazine covers...
Makes me glad I didn't have an absentee mother
Or a father who fucking hated me,
I was raised completely clean, now I sit here chasin' dreams
It relaxes the side of me which is constantly stressed
I have these songs in my head I can't make
Cause problems develop and monsters are let out
And fire and water eject from the top of the end of the world

Nod if it's yes, that it's a cause and effect
But the repercussions coming haven't bothered me yet
Apocalypses eclipse our species
But we're already dead, I just pretend to breathe in
Working a job that saps all my time
I think that's my cue card to black ball my life
Shake the magic 8-ball but don't read it
I hope the seasons change and I hope that people see it

[Interlude 3]
I don't need to have watched Game of Thrones
To know that winter is coming
Like, holy shit, it's Alaska,
So I gotta enjoy the two months of 80 degree fuck weather
And prepare my anus for the below freezing conditions
It's easy to miss it, but this life is quick
This life's a bitch
But I heard petting it lowers your blood pressure

[Verse 4]
It all contradicts the persona I give
I would've acted different had I saw what I missed
It's not the build up that killed us,
It's the let-down, I need to hang it up like Robin Williams
Smooth move, way to go, texts like "too soon"
A legend is dead, I just say it for the tunes, dude
I look at the clock and realize I'm cuckoo

You won me over, but to lose you
Is the nail in my coffin, but it's over, you dig it?
But only they didn't -
And when the game is on the line, I'm just a Kobe game winner
So we ain't missin' out on all this fun stuff
You told me wait in this and my moment'll come
And I know it's the one chance I'll ever get
To knowin' my limitations,
White Noise - I hope you anticipate it

[Mr.DGAF]

The beat is very cool. But there's some weird switch in it when it starts, like around 11 or 12 seconds. Not a very smooth transition. Just a nitpick. It also happens after the first interlude haha.

The delivery on this is fucking cool haha. You sound so laid back but it's a confident one. Not like similar laid back verses you've done. The shrink wrap my dick bar to the keep every day marked is sick haha. Like the first interlude, the satellite rhyme/hear my voice kept it from becoming just talking and whatnot. Verse 2 is cool, not much to say on it. The second interlude reminds me of one from GF. The end of the interlude is really cool though, the five minutes compared to eight minutes was pretty nice. Verse 3 is also nice. The nod if it's yes bar....hahaha. NICE. Dat interlude too. Prepare the anus. The last verse is my favorite. Siiiiick writing, the Robin Williams line and the follow up were nice. The delivery on the "tunes dude" line made me laugh tbh. IDK you sounded childish right there, and I think that was the intent. Always like the Kobe references of course.

[EvryOnesACrtc]

Cool, laid back, verses. I liked the vibe. Hypnotizing melody. Overall, it was decent. I felt like I had to really try hard to listen though. Maybe change the beat up a little during the interlude, or use a different tone of voice to keep the listener engaged. I mean, over 5 minutes is a long time to keep everything in the song going at the same pace. Switch it up on us.

Your lines were outstanding. I liked the Robbin Williams one, much like Mr. DGAF, even though it really is too soon lol and that absentee mother/magazine cover rhyme was dope. I love these set of lines, but I felt like they would've hit harder if you would've emphasized them more or said them differently:

"Everything I say just links back to this
See life there? Yeah - I think that's a bitch
Sick tracks, so switch back, and this bastard kid
Will never stop it, I'd rather shrink wrap my dick"

Thanks for always feeding me.

[Eedee]

Thanks for the feed, you two. Appreciate it!

And I see what you're saying, EvryOnesACrtc, but my intention with this was that I'm always either a) yelling or b) close to yelling when it comes to my delivery lmao. I wanted to mellow out while still trying to convey some type of conviction. It sucks that it came off as boring. I may try and redo it with a different delivery and compare the multiple versions. Couldn't hurt at all to see! Thanks for the in-depth feed and actually picking apart the song and telling me what I could fix. Really appreciate that.

[FxTDilz]

First off, the Robin Williams line was dope lol. But this song was really deep, it kind of expresses a mind state that I myself have been in and the emotion you have through out the song really enhances that down mood, I'm not sure if it's just because I can relate to it type thing and have been there but the song kinda puts me back there. I don't know haha. But it's dark, it's deep and it's dope. Nice work bro

[sneakerheadshady]

the verses are super solid here. im wondering if your style would be more suited to faster, or at least do some much faster songs, there were some parts where i could tell you were almost forcing yourself to slow down.. interested to see how this type of scheme would sound faster...

[Eedee]

the verses are super solid here. im wondering if your style would be more suited to faster, or at least do some much faster songs, there were some parts where i could tell you were almost forcing yourself to slow down.. interested to see how this type of scheme would sound faster...

There's definitely some faster songs on the album (this is actually probably one of the slowest ones)

[Mr. Chambers]

I was going to listen but soundcloud doesn't seem to want to work at all on my phone...so sorryz

[Pixel]

I love the artistic turn focusing on tipics of life and contemplation,
Technically not outstanding but still a great hypnotic track about a very relatable topic!

[Atone]

The album cover should be my face when I'm takin' a shit

sig worthy, lmao, soon as i heard it i busted out laughing

good song tho, smooth and kind of a chill laid back type song

[KoLyric]

"That we are small compared to the
Eight hundred, sixty four thousand three hundred and twenty seven
Mile diameter of the sun"


Funny thing about that, in terms of perspective and such, is that we're essentially the medium. The middle of everything. You can infinitely zoom in, and infinitely zoom out.

The beauty of infinity is its ability to nullify any slight against our "significance" by defending it with average. lmao

[Eedee]

"That we are small compared to the
Eight hundred, sixty four thousand three hundred and twenty seven
Mile diameter of the sun"


Funny thing about that, in terms of perspective and such, is that we're essentially the medium. The middle of everything. You can infinitely zoom in, and infinitely zoom out.

The beauty of infinity is its ability to nullify any slight against our "significance" by defending it with average. lmao

You're not wrong, man haha

[KoLyric]

Oh, and dope track btw. lol.